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Moonlit Reflections</b>

Velvet waters surge
and swell;
gentle persistence lapping
at the sandy shores.
Grain by grain, debris
is swept;
caressed and cleansed
within the lightly verdant foam.

Subtle erosion,
an angel reveals.
Crystalline fragility;
a rescue
(long awaited)
from this, its hidden grave.
Prismatic eyes reflect
the simple brilliance
of Selune's seductive smile.

Glass, marred by glass unborn;
etchings deeper worn upon
this pock-marked silicone calendar;
Years, to this angel, have been
unkind.


A God's pale fingers
(to a statue so small)
consume her broken delicance.
Cracked frigidity, now held warm,
as scars of Chronos find soothing comfort
inside the veil; wrapped tight
within His silken
folds of satin safety.

Stained-glassed wings refract
the light of adoration.
Delicate treasure, released
by the sea; long last,
does restoration begin.




S. Nycole Bridle
April 21, 2003
Another scene that demanded painting.. couldn't get the screen shot I wanted.. moonlight reflecting off waves crashing on a beach.. so I gave up.


Thanks to ~painfetish ~repus and *wildmonky for prereading and suggestions.


Enjoy..
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kyakuchuu Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008   Writer
One of the best I have read here.
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aminuetin6-8time Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2005
beautiful. the fragmentation could probably use some work to improve on the message and let it flow better..but that's just what i think, and i'm only a freshman heh.
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ladynyk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. As for the flow, everything I write is written to be read aloud; I'm not sure if you tried it that way or not. I do, however, always appreciate feedback :)
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InannasDescent Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2004
While I, too (being the word geek i am), have never known of the word "delicance", I took its meaning to be the combination of 'delicate' and 'elegance'.

The phrase "stain-glass wings"......did you intend it to mean stained-glass, as in the colored, fragile substance of windows and sun-catchers? Or is there a *deeper* meaning to it; thus "stain" as opposed to "stained"?

"Silken folds of satin safety" - how I love such tangible alliteration. ;)

This piece has a lovely wave-like cadence to it, as I'm sure you intended.

Inspiring, sweetness. :floating:

~Vicki
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ladynyk Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2004  Hobbyist Writer
wow, you're right about the "stained-glass".. I need to change that, lol. No deeper meaning, just a typo.

While all of the aliteration was intended, the cadence of the poem just kind of developed over the course of the editing process :) It appears that my subconscious knows what it's doing, lol.

Thanks for the wonderful words, sweetheart,

:blowkiss:
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jl Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2003  Professional Writer
I always had a weakness for Aphrodite and the story of her birth :-) (Smile)

Regards :-) (Smile)
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collective-uncon Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2003
Girl I got moon and shore photos galore just did a half an hour search for thee :) (Smile)

Email me!!
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freespace Featured By Owner May 29, 2003
That is one of the smoothest and most beautiful poems i have ever read. I bow before your skills. That would go so nicely with a picture I have in mind. Maybe I'll make a render of it and see if I can make it match the poem :-) (Smile)

+fav

Best regards,
Steve
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myrth Featured By Owner May 28, 2003   Writer
this alone just melts me:

Glass, marred by glass unborn

incredible, all of it..
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baby221 Featured By Owner May 22, 2003
All hail the Almighty Poetess:
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