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Moonlit Reflections</b>

Velvet waters surge
and swell;
gentle persistence lapping
at the sandy shores.
Grain by grain, debris
is swept;
caressed and cleansed
within the lightly verdant foam.

Subtle erosion,
an angel reveals.
Crystalline fragility;
a rescue
(long awaited)
from this, its hidden grave.
Prismatic eyes reflect
the simple brilliance
of Selune's seductive smile.

Glass, marred by glass unborn;
etchings deeper worn upon
this pock-marked silicone calendar;
Years, to this angel, have been
unkind.


A God's pale fingers
(to a statue so small)
consume her broken delicance.
Cracked frigidity, now held warm,
as scars of Chronos find soothing comfort
inside the veil; wrapped tight
within His silken
folds of satin safety.

Stained-glassed wings refract
the light of adoration.
Delicate treasure, released
by the sea; long last,
does restoration begin.




S. Nycole Bridle
April 21, 2003
Another scene that demanded painting.. couldn't get the screen shot I wanted.. moonlight reflecting off waves crashing on a beach.. so I gave up.


Thanks to ~painfetish ~repus and *wildmonky for prereading and suggestions.


Enjoy..
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:iconkyakuchuu:
kyakuchuu Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2008   Writer
One of the best I have read here.
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aminuetin6-8time Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2005
beautiful. the fragmentation could probably use some work to improve on the message and let it flow better..but that's just what i think, and i'm only a freshman heh.
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ladynyk Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. As for the flow, everything I write is written to be read aloud; I'm not sure if you tried it that way or not. I do, however, always appreciate feedback :)
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InannasDescent Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2004
While I, too (being the word geek i am), have never known of the word "delicance", I took its meaning to be the combination of 'delicate' and 'elegance'.

The phrase "stain-glass wings"......did you intend it to mean stained-glass, as in the colored, fragile substance of windows and sun-catchers? Or is there a *deeper* meaning to it; thus "stain" as opposed to "stained"?

"Silken folds of satin safety" - how I love such tangible alliteration. ;)

This piece has a lovely wave-like cadence to it, as I'm sure you intended.

Inspiring, sweetness. :floating:

~Vicki
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ladynyk Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2004  Hobbyist Writer
wow, you're right about the "stained-glass".. I need to change that, lol. No deeper meaning, just a typo.

While all of the aliteration was intended, the cadence of the poem just kind of developed over the course of the editing process :) It appears that my subconscious knows what it's doing, lol.

Thanks for the wonderful words, sweetheart,

:blowkiss:
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jl Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2003  Professional Writer
I always had a weakness for Aphrodite and the story of her birth :-) (Smile)

Regards :-) (Smile)
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collective-uncon Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2003
Girl I got moon and shore photos galore just did a half an hour search for thee :) (Smile)

Email me!!
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freespace Featured By Owner May 29, 2003
That is one of the smoothest and most beautiful poems i have ever read. I bow before your skills. That would go so nicely with a picture I have in mind. Maybe I'll make a render of it and see if I can make it match the poem :-) (Smile)

+fav

Best regards,
Steve
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myrth Featured By Owner May 28, 2003   Writer
this alone just melts me:

Glass, marred by glass unborn

incredible, all of it..
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baby221 Featured By Owner May 22, 2003
All hail the Almighty Poetess:
Worship Worship Worship Worship Worship Worship Worship Worship Worship Worship Worship Worship Worship Worship Worship Worship Worship Worship Worship Worship Worship Worship Worship Worship Worship Worship
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affirmation Featured By Owner May 7, 2003
Excellent flow of metaphors and imagery here:

Subtle erosion,
an angel reveals.
Crystalline fragility;
a rescue
(long awaited)
from this, its hidden grave.
Prismatic eyes reflect
the simple brilliance
of Selune's seductive smile.

In particular was very cool, and very absorbing into the piece.
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phixion Featured By Owner May 5, 2003   Writer
Lately I think I've grown akin to rhyme and verse...shame on me. Or at least verse. Too much Shakespeare and other poetry. However, love the imagery here...very soothing and somewhat depressing (to me, at least). Pardon the lateness of my commentary...letting 100 some deviations pile up is a habit I need to get rid of..
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bluvirgo Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2003
I couldn't help but thing a long lost sun catcher being washed up on shore, and someone taking it as a sign. Or being washed frm one part of the world to another, and finally getting there.

I think of fantasy when I read this. A living glass angel, resurfacing from the water.

but to be really honest with you, there is this large wooosh of emotion when I read this. Of calmness, of contemplation, of realization, intellegence, and being true to oneself. To me, the images go further then just what they read. It's healing from pain, what time has worn on an individual. I think of an old old woman when I read this.......

SO many pictures, so little time...
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neywon Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2003
I was at the coast this week and spent some time at night on the beach. There is something just majikal about it. This poem catchs that peerfectly. Great work as always.
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aenim-a Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2003   Photographer
at the sandy shores.
Grain by grain, debris
is swept;
caressed and cleansed
within the lightly verdant foam.


spoken aloud that made me cry...
+fav
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silly-shay Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2003
Wow, this was amazing. Your writing makes me so jealous. lol. Actually, you've got quite a vocabulary. And that makes me upset because I'm too shallow to use big words. lol, just kidding. But lovely work as always :) (Smile)
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-henrique- Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2003   Writer
I react to poetry in only a few ways. I either take something meaningful away from a piece, or I sense the emotions behind the words.

Like sand to glass, I felt something transform from the beginning, throughout, until the end.
I sense something of repression behind this, repression from desires and the ability to reach them. Like angel whose halo's don't glow as brightly as they once did. There's an overflowing of sexual imagery, of virginity and the unknown, but nothing of fear.

This makes me think of what it must be like to receive something that is not intended to be... like a human who is granted angel wings and only later realizes that they deteriorate because humans know not how to preserve them. This then made me think of preservation and the tide and change and transformation.

Nothing can be preserved but matter.
That's all that matters--but even that is not the point.

The point is this made me realize my mortality and accept it more than anything I could ever have said to myself to calm my fears of having fear when I die.

That's my one biggest fear. Fearing the moment of death, not for dying, but for the unknown.

After all, why be afraid. Countless have taken the step into those waters...
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kindred Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2003  Hobbyist Writer

I cannot comment to the best of my ability at the moment, so let me just say that this is damn good, and your voice and imagery in this are excellent. Great job!
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groovus Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2003
And hell yeah I like ... what a euphemism!
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groovus Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2003
[link] this could have been your shot. Soon as I read your description I figured that I have something of the likes in my favorites.

But wow once again I like what you do here. You pull out a variety of punctuation (including parenthesis) and fonts and it all makes more sense the way it is done. Your wording as usual is quite brilliant in the sense that you have a good way with articulate words (I'm reading Gurdjieff once more and learn the importance of using words apt and properly, preferably in their most sober constitution - shit do I make sense?) in knowing when to say what. You probably already know everything I say here about your poem(s), so just take it as well intended encouragement. Or let me put it this way; next time I wanna hear from you, that you're being featured in a lit-mag.

Good imaging here despite the lacking of a suitable screeny! Do check out that link I put up.
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stormclouds Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2003
You know I like this. I don't even have to tell you that. ...and where have you been? I have a present for you and you haven't been around for me to give it to you....

~Emm Horns
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hollowsociety Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2003
how i love your poetry.
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-tank Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2003
wow...this is amazing...the imagery and flow has left me in awe...+fav ...great work
-tank

-=don't fear to imagine=-
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slum Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2003  Hobbyist General Artist
great job on this hunni
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111uminate Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2003
Very impressive; this exhibits a flow of proffesionalism throughout. Everything worked together nicely, and complemented itself. Again, it seems you create a style and technique to properly express certain emotions. Great work.
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kafie Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2003  Hobbyist General Artist
that's so... just wow.... wow
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livingbyair Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2003  Hobbyist Writer
i wish i had stain glass wings





o wait.......so thats what those are....hah! awesome

*tries to fly away...but falls on face X)
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parrish Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2003
It's the 5th time I read it and I'm still pleased... Besides the great imagery, you seem to have chosen the perfect words for it, and it flows so beautifully! Congratulations, I loved it!
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wu-wei Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2003

I come from the water.

I love the ebb and flow of this piece.
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repus Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2003
you know i love this; great flow & wonderful imagery make you and your words come to life everytime... Here's a kiss for you, my love!
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-anathema Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2003   Writer
beautiful imagery, and i loved ths subtle s sound running throughout, gave it such a sof, gentle flow...a pleasure to read. as always :D (Big Grin)
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sumants Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2003   Writer
As always...love it.

Two words make me pause, though...silicone and delicance. The former an artificial polymer is what plastic surgeons use for breast enhancements. Sand is silicon dioxide. Colour me geeky. Delicance, however, is a word that I've only seen used once before this one. There is no dictionary that told me what it means. The closest I got was delicateness. Colour me stupid, but in a shade that doesn't clash with geeky.

Hug
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killcapital Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2003
Your last name is not Bridle.
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aioyp Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2003
:speechless:
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deviousindiestar Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2003
"a rescue
(long awaited)
from this, its hidden grave."

Love, love, love. It really does sound like waves...lapping at the shore. This line was beautiful to me.

Love,
Lee
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tangledweb Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2003  Professional General Artist
(fox-whistling) Wow. I can visualize this very clearly, or at least my version of the poem...tarnished beauty...delicate and vulnerability exposed...but you then support it with a measure of strength and reinvigoration. This is so tangible I can taste it.
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painfetish Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2003
nice

as scars of Chronos find soothing comfort
love that line for some reason
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prodoxius Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2003
damn your good at this
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wolfdancer Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2003   Writer
Great job sweetie..... very great job with the tone and flow, I agree with the above about how it seems to go in and out.

Very peaceful, makes me wish that I were at the ocean.
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wildmonky Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2003  Student Writer
"Years, to this angel, have been
unkind." superb.
I love your imagery and syntax sweets.
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raphaelclass Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2003
it begins and ends over and over

as the waves go in and out
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